英语写作中的遣词造句与高分作文|英语写作模板
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摘 要: 英语写作主要考查的是考生能否写出地道的句子,有了漂亮的句子,用适当的连接词和过渡语将其连句成段,再加上一些亮点词汇的点缀,就可以组成一篇完整的作文。因此,写作练习应该把重心放在遣词造句上。
关键词: 英语写作 遣词造句 高分作文
英语作文中的提纲要点往往在一定程度上规定了考生的表达思路,但提纲式写作试题仍然具有一定的开放性,给考生留出了一定的自由发挥(造句)空间,有利于考生充分展示自己的英语书面表达能力。如果能针对作文的要点进行造句训练,不断提高灵活造句能力,然后运用这些句子组段成篇,写起作文来就会得心应手。长期训练下去将有助于考生写出“较高级词汇”和“较高级句子”,从而在英语写作中获得高分。
本文以2009年高考全国II卷作文为例,对写作中的造句训练加以说明,希望能对考生平时的写作有所裨益。
原题内容:假定你是李华,你的美国朋友Sarah打算暑期来北京旅游,来信询问改建后前门大街的情况。请你写封回信,简单介绍以下内容:
1.简况:长800余米、600多年历史、300余家商铺;
2.位置:天安门广场南面;
3.交通:公共汽车17、69、59等路,地铁2号线;
4.特色:步行街、当当车、茶馆、剧院等。
如果将要点简单地转换为下面的英语句子:
1.It is more than 800 metres long.It has a history of more than 600 years.There are about 300 shops along it.
2.It lies in the south of Tian’anmen Square.
3.You can take Buses No.17,69,59 or Subway Line 2.
4.The pedestrian street,trolley cars,teahouses and theatres are its characteristics.
显然,这些单句涵盖了所有内容要点,句子正确率也很高,但简单的词汇和单一的句式在考试中是很难拿到高分的。这时就需要考生把句子化简为优。例如,可将上述要点1合并为:It is an 800-metre-long antient street with a history of 600 years,along which there are more than 300 shops.这样,在众多类似表达中,阅卷老师定会感到眼前一亮。可见,要想在考试中写出高分句式,平日的造句练习是必不可少的。
我们以上文提纲要点为例,进行造句如下(篇幅所限,这里每个要点只提供三个例句):
要点1:简况:长800余米、600多年历史、300余家商铺
1)It is a long street with a length of 800 meters and a history of 600 years,along which there are more than 300 shops.The things in the shops are so beautiful that I am sure you will buy a lot of them.(固定搭配、高级句式及细节补充)
2)Qianmen Street is an ancient street with a long histroy of more than 600 years.There are over 300 shops and it has a length of more than 800 metres.(高级词汇、句式变化多样)
3)Qianmen Street,which is 800 metres in length,has a history of 600 years.With more than 300 shops,the street is among the symbols of Beijing.(高级词汇和句式、句式多样化)
要点2.位置:天安门广场南面
1)Located in the south of the Tian’anmen Square,the street is fairly easy to find.(句式多变)
2)Situated near Tian’anmen Square,Qianmen Street has the advantage of convenience.(固定搭配及多变的句式)
3)As the street is in the center of Beijing,just to the south of Tian’anmen Square,it’s very convenient to get there by bus.(插入语和惯用搭配增强了句式的多样性)
要点3.交通:公共汽车17、69、59等路,地铁2号线
1)Many buses stop there,including Buses No.17,69,and 59.Subway is another access.Choose Line 2,and you’ll be taken right there.(高级词汇和复杂句式)
2)It is convenient for you to go there by Buses No.17,69 or 59,and Subway Line 2 is also available.(高级句式与高级词汇)
3)Apart from this,it is quite convenient for you to get there as Buses No.17,69,or 59 will take you to the right place.Subway Line 2 is also available.(多变的句式及高级词汇)
要点4.特色:步行街、当当车、茶馆、剧院等
1)What’s more,the pedestrian street,trolley cars,teahouses and theatres are its characteristics.Therefore,you can entertain yourself by doing such things as going shopping,drinking Chinese traditional tea or enjoying movies here.I’m sure you will like it.(高级句式与词汇)
2)Upon your arrival,you’re advised to take a walk along the street.It will be great fun to drive a trolley car.Moreover,you may as well step into a nearby teahouse and gain knowledge about Chinese culture.Besides,you can enjoy yourself in a cinema,which must be a feast for your eyes.(高级句式与高级词汇)
3)It will be a great surprise if you know the rebuilt Qianmen Street’s advantages.There are pedestrian streets,along which you can have a comfortable walk.The interesting trolley car can attract/draw your attention,too.You can also enter the nearby teahouse to enjoy Chinese tea and experience the splendid tea culture.Or you can go to the theater if you feel interested in (are enthusiastic about) Chinese opera.(细节补充、高级句型与词汇)
要点5.合适的结尾
1)In a word,having your summer holiday in Beijing will be your best choice.I’m looking forward to your coming.(总结、过渡,句式富于变化)
2)As far as I know,Qianmen Street is much nicer than before.And if you come to Beijing,I would be more than glad to be your guide .(过渡自然、句式富于变化)
3)I’ll be glad if you can pay a visit to our capital city!And I’m sure you’ll like it.(自然过渡)
如果在造句的基础上,注意长短句的相互结合,再组段成篇就比较容易。当然,除了要考虑语法结构的多样性、词汇运用的准确性和语言的得体性之外,还要注意上下文的连贯性,因为句与句、段与段之间缺乏必要的连接词和过渡语会使文章读起来让人感觉唐突或干涩。因此,考生应从行文的实际需要出发,强化连接词和过渡语的运用意识。例如,上文中各个要点之间就是通过扩充细节、使用状语、连接词及过渡语,使组篇后的文章能够自成一体(如要点5中斜体部分均属于自然过渡)。由于篇幅所限,其它要点中的过渡手段,这里不再赘述。
英语写作主要考查的是考生能否写出地道的句子,句子的多样性取决于句子类型的丰富性,它既考查考生简单句和复杂句的综合运用能力,又考查考生对不同句型的掌握情况。因此在写作练习中,应该把重心放在造句训练上,这是最容易把握的部分,也是写出高分作文的一种有效手段。
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